Sunday, February 8, 2009

How do you filter through feedback and crits?

Our question of the day for our fellow writers out there is how do you know when to take criticism?

We posted our query in a forum and are sifting through critiques and are left wondering whose advice to take.

And which version of the query do you prefer? You know we can't resist putting up another poll, so please vote. It really does help us out a ton.

Thanks in advance for any comments and/or advice.

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Version 1:

Kate Lowry has come to accept that her best friend, Ava, is dead. She’s been missing for a year and her disappearance is one false lead away from cold case status. And then, a mysterious e-mail from Ava with cryptic clues to her whereabouts appears in her inbox. If she were like most girls, Kate would ignore Ava’s warning and go straight to the police.

But Kate isn’t most girls.

Instead, she decides to channel Nancy Drew, pearls and all. Of course, Kate’s pearls are faux-Chanel, her skirts are way shorter and she’d totally take everyone's favorite girl detective in a girl fight, but you get the idea.

The emails continue and Kate’s quest takes a dangerous turn, compelling sexy bad boy, Liam, and her awkward neighbor, Seth, to become her knights-in-(not so)-shining armor. Armed with her new found sidekicks, Kate launches an investigation involving the school’s resident Queen Bee, a newly-thin ex-bestie, and even one of her tarnished knights. Kate knew finding Ava wasn’t going to be easy, but figuring out who she should trust is more difficult than she ever could have imagined.

After all, everyone’s a suspect.

We are sisters turned writing partners and GMAIL is a YA mystery, complete at XX,XXX words.

Version 2:

Kate Lowry's best friend, Ava, is dead. Or so everyone assumes. She's been missing for a year, when Kate receives a mysterious e-mail from Ava with cryptic clues to her whereabouts.

She should go to the police, but instead, she decides to channel everyone’s favorite girl detective, pearls and all. Of course, Kate’s pearls are faux-Chanel, her skirts are way shorter and she’d totally take Nancy Drew in a girl fight, but you get the idea.

The emails continue and Kate’s quest takes a dangerous turn, compelling sexy bad boy, Liam, and her awkward neighbor, Seth, to become her knights-in-(not so)-shining armor. Armed with her new found sidekicks, Kate launches an investigation involving the school’s resident Queen Bee, a newly-thin ex-best-friend, and even one of her tarnished knights. Kate knew finding Ava wasn’t going to be easy, but figuring out who she should trust is more difficult than she ever could have imagined.

After all, everyone’s a suspect.

We are sisters turned writing partners and GMAIL is a YA mystery, complete at XX,XXX words.

10 comments:

Tara said...

Of course they both sound good to me!

Lisa and Laura said...

You're too easy. You need to talk to the person who voted for us to just start over. Ha!

spinregina said...

I thought version one is the stronger of the two. Both good, though. Good luck!

Lisa and Laura said...

Thanks Regina. Your opinion carries serious weight with us.

I know Regina is the name of your city, but I always think of you as Regina...can't help it.

spinregina said...

God no! Regina rhymes with....I'm sure you can go there on your own. KRISTEN.

If the person who voted to "just start over" didn't comment and explain themselves I offer that their opinion carries no weight. I have little patience for commenters (or in this case, voters) who don't follow through.

slhastings said...

That was mean of that person who voted start over! Probably a random! Me? I'm leaning towards number one as well...

Oh! Make sure to go http://misssnarksfirstvictim.blogspot.com/
tomorrow. My post will be #37.

Good karma will come to you...

: )

Lisa and Laura said...

OMG KRISTEN, I had no idea what Regina rhymed with! I was thinking of the name RegEEna. I almost snarfed diet coke all over my computer reading that.

Thanks for the moral support girls. I'm partial to #1 too, but we're still busy refining, so hopefully the final query will be a better version of the first.

Sam - We entered as well. Our first draft is finished and we're still editing, but we've been over the first 250 about 8,000 times, so we figured why the heck not! We're #2. Can't wait to read your entry. Good luck!!

slhastings said...

Cool! I'll look for number two! You must have had your finger on the button right at 8:59.

(I was worried I wouldn't make it, coming in at 9:07!)

spinregina said...

1. Yes, Regina. Not Regeena. That's why the travel agents I used to work with refused to say the city name properly when they were calling internationally; they found it weeded out a lot of bad jokes.

2. The live traffic feed at the bottom of your site makes me look like a stalker.

Lisa and Laura said...

We love having stalkers. Um..actually we just love having people that actually read the total crap we post on a day-to-day basis. So please, continue stalking. And seriously, ditch Regina (rhymes with va-jay-jay) and move to Cleveland already. The wine blurred playdates alone will make it worth your while.